It's what ktd222 said. I took Jon's suggestion and hacked off some parts (which feels much like amputating my limbs - but if I don't need a foot it really must go). I'm playing with Pendragon's suggestion of moving the "wise man" section as well.
I've also re-structured it, and have a better vision for the ending. Thanks, everyone, for bothering about it. I'll keep it posted - unfortunately, my life is busy and I don't get on here half as much as I want to.
Madness is my defense against Reality.
it flowed so well and nice! i like it