Missed this as well. Great work! I love the freedom of the language. A character restrained, though with a mind unrestrained. Yes, I would like to see it expanded too.
I am a little confused stylistically. Some of the lines are perfectly lucid and articulate and employ commas, full stops etc, while others in the stream of thought have removed such grammatical ties. However, why return to lucidity in the midst of the wordstream to go back to third person narrative? It seems to me anyway that streams of thought are timeless in nature, so you don't need to jump out again to state what he thought, when we can see that thought in motion. Just my opinion.
I love the phrase 'the gag muted his soprano'.
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And the 'pug faced bonzo' - would the character be a Cynic?
I think 'he was not pleased with his audience...' loses a little with the clear description of his situation early on in the piece.
Just some ideas. Take them with caution. My words run faster than my mind can follow. I hope I've caught up this time.
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