*i remembered this yesterday, wrote it when i was in my late teens.* (which was ages ago, lol). Anyway, I must've known that one day I would need to laugh at my foresight.
It was a
Simple thing
Waiting a few
Lifetimes to
Be with him;
It's the
20 minutes he's
Late coming
Home from work
I can't stand.
shh!!!
the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.
I like the humour in it.
I sang of leaves, of leaves of gold, and leaves of gold there grew.
Such truth to the poem. Is this based on true love?
Such stinging truth of such a small reality. It is wonderfully poignant and surprising
"real
loneliness
is not
necessarily
limited to
when
you are
alone"
-C. Bukowski
Funny how I saw this not in here but in the much-discussed-of-late plagiarising forum while going through that to check if Prince's last post here has been taken as well. The title took me in for a read, and then I liked it and came back here to see whose it is. Good one Amuse, amusing and amazing.
(someone thought to comment on your poem there so I thought I should rather steer them here: http://forum.3rbdream.net/dream29/pa...isited-128787/ )
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...the smell of flowers through metal labyrinths.
amuse, I just love it! It's terrific and so true....LOL
"It's so mysterious, the land of tears."
Chapter 7, The Little Prince ~ Antoine de Saint-Exupéry
Unfortunately, the comment you refer to (by Inez, the moderator) may have assumed that the poem was written by our local rat-plagiaristOriginally Posted by symphony
I'm glad you liked it!
And yes...it is true, NOW. At the time - over
20 years ago -I was um addicted to Cosmopolitan mags and had the idea to send poetry in. This sort of poppped out. No idea where from, either - I didn't have a bf or anything to inspire it! I kind of liked it, too, though.And I have a new boyfriend - had the last for 17,18 years (give or take a few?) and this one for over half a year, and my patience is nowhere to be found! But he's VERY patient (though frequently late) and I love him dearly.
Hence the remembrance of this poem the other day, LOL!!!
*BTW, thx for the link to the Arabic thread. Blech. Not the nicest way to compliment us, is it? Imitation's one thing; theft is another...
shh!!!
the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.
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